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So, you say you know
What it feels like
Too fall in love?

I think you lie
Cause no one knows
So, shut up and leave
And dont come back

If you think you can try
Then come on in
But play by the rules
And dont cross the line

Learn to stick up
For yourself
Cause people aint
Gonna help you
When youre deep down

If you think you
Still know what
Love is
Explain it to me
To see if oyu
Will go home
And stay put
©2009 ~Bellarakel15
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Author's Comments

ok... so i kinda made it up
on the way
i think its ok...
but i like people to tell me the truth
so finish it
and you shall tell me later
what you tihnk...

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:iconnightmare24212:
I like this one too. But I have a suggestion or two for you, if you don't mind.

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Have you ever notice that your always there when I need a friend?
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:iconbellarakel15:
go right ahead...

i need to learn to be open minded

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"A rescue attempt would be ilogical."- Spock
"Is there a problem, Officer?" James T. Kirk
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Is your heart worth defending?- Framing Hanley, All in your hands.
"I wish I could hear your voice.." Framing hanley, Alone in this Bed
:iconnightmare24212:
well instead of breaking up a line into two parts, complete the thought. like instead of

she can't
and she won't

do something like

she can't and won't

you know what I mean or am I not making sense?

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:hug:
Have you ever notice that your always there when I need a friend?
:iconglomp:
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dont worry youree amking total sense
im im here thinking im all stupid for actually not
having thought of that... :D
thanks!!

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"A rescue attempt would be ilogical."- Spock
"Is there a problem, Officer?" James T. Kirk
---
Is your heart worth defending?- Framing Hanley, All in your hands.
"I wish I could hear your voice.." Framing hanley, Alone in this Bed
:iconnightmare24212:
no, don't think you're stupid, darling. I use to do that all the time, too. until someone pointed that out to me. Can't wait to see what else you're going to write. :D

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:hug:
Have you ever notice that your always there when I need a friend?
:iconglomp:
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:iconbellarakel15:
well, thanks it means a lot you would point that out to me... :D

--
"A rescue attempt would be ilogical."- Spock
"Is there a problem, Officer?" James T. Kirk
---
Is your heart worth defending?- Framing Hanley, All in your hands.
"I wish I could hear your voice.." Framing hanley, Alone in this Bed
:iconnightmare24212:
also, another little thing that I know I do all the time.

she's everywhere
and nowhere
here
and there

when you go onto the next line you start with 'and'. Then it gets a feeling of drawing out the poem. Just a weird peice of info.

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:hug:
Have you ever notice that your always there when I need a friend?
:iconglomp:
[url=[link]
:iconbellarakel15:
thanks, eve nif it was a weird peace of info... :D

--
"A rescue attempt would be ilogical."- Spock
"Is there a problem, Officer?" James T. Kirk
---
Is your heart worth defending?- Framing Hanley, All in your hands.
"I wish I could hear your voice.." Framing hanley, Alone in this Bed
:iconnightmare24212:
mhm, I'm like that sometimes.
:D

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:hug:
Have you ever notice that your always there when I need a friend?
:iconglomp:
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